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Two Become One (Shards Pt. III)

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Eulogy:
I like stories with dialogue, fav so far!

Jerry:
Well, this is turning into what I feared. I didn't tell it explicitly the last time, by saying 'Kara has an interesint character' (or similar, I don't quite remember exactly, and not much time to go look back). She seems to have something like 'evil' in her which is growing very very slowly.

First, she didn't know anyone but Leo.
She was disappointed by the answer of Leo. She perhaps took it the hard way round.
She thought that she would be relieved with the one she loved next, and did everything to be with him again, thinking that she would be happy.
But then, she realised it was a mistake, and tries to come back to Leo (by all means again), manages to convince Leo, without showing him consequences of his actions. (well, it is always said that if someone tries to break the frontier between the living and the dead, serious consequences will occur, like some sort of gate was opened for evil spirits)
In the final part, she enters the body of a girl, Layla and it seems that her plan is to take control of her slowly, until she gets total control over Layla.

Just some speculation from my part, of how I'm seeing it coming, how I might turn the story if I were to continue the story ;)

LeoReborn:
Thats not what I Intended.....

Jerry:
Yes, sorry I let myself go a little astray. This is what I came up with and as I said, it's complete speculation. It might not be what you intended to. Don't take it badly, your story is good, it's just that I have this little ability to try to come up with a different way of interpreting stories if only part of it was told. Don't stop because I said those, what you wrote were wonderful! And if you 'force' me into one 'way' the story is going, I won't get the change to make such speculations :)

LeoReborn:

--- Quote from: Jerry on August 15, 2010, 11:50:43 AM ---Yes, sorry I let myself go a little astray. This is what I came up with and as I said, it's complete speculation. It might not be what you intended to. Don't take it badly, your story is good, it's just that I have this little ability to try to come up with a different way of interpreting stories if only part of it was told. Don't stop because I said those, what you wrote were wonderful! And if you 'force' me into one 'way' the story is going, I won't get the change to make such speculations :)

--- End quote ---

Its unlikely that I will add anymore to this series, not because of what you said, Jerry, but for the reason, I already decided I wont elaborate on this Series further.

However, I may begin something else, so keep an eye open.

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