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Two Become One (Shards Pt. III)
Eulogy:
I will keep an eye open! I love your stories! =D
Frenchfry:
There is a severe lack of explosions here. We are not amused.
Anyways, the speech format made this installment 2076% easier to read. I don't, however, think that the *two becoming one* concept was built upon enough. I mean, just like that, she agreed to have a long-dead girl's soul coexist in her body?
Let me expand on this:
We humans are very dark creatures. We think, do, and say things that would make Virgin Mary roll over in her grave. Hell, someone had access to my innermost thoughts, and could, if they wanted, make me tell people them, nobody would ever speak to me again. Our minds, stupid as it may sound, are our only rightful and unbreakable vaults. Even the sweetest little child has thoughts hidden in there that would make grandmothers cry, and they have a right to keep those to themselves.
With your writing skill, I'm sure you can gloss over this with a little effort, though.
LeoReborn:
Its a LOVE Story. If you want Explosions, Watch The 2nd Transformers Movie.
Im not altering it so you can amuse yourself via "Visualing someone Exploding"
Frenchfry:
--- Quote from: Unbreakable on August 24, 2010, 03:31:59 AM ---Its a LOVE Story. If you want Explosions, Watch The 2nd Transformers Movie.
Im not altering it so you can amuse yourself via "Visualing someone Exploding"
--- End quote ---
...You... know I was joking about that part... right?
LeoReborn:
--- Quote from: Frenchfry545 on August 24, 2010, 03:38:49 AM ---
--- Quote from: Unbreakable on August 24, 2010, 03:31:59 AM ---Its a LOVE Story. If you want Explosions, Watch The 2nd Transformers Movie.
Im not altering it so you can amuse yourself via "Visualing someone Exploding"
--- End quote ---
...You... know I was joking about that part... right?
--- End quote ---
*Another Kunai Hits a Tree Near Fry* Yeah, I know.
Speaking of Explosions, It seems I keep buying Paperbombs, instead of Regular Paper. Go Figure.....So, Yeah.... *boom*
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