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Eulogy:
“Let’s go Brianna!” I had a huge surprise for her birthday, and she had no clue what she was in for. I looked at her for a moment. Her silky brown hair down to her shoulders, her crystal blue eyes gleaming in the sun. She got in the front seat and I got my new convertible Ford Mustang running.
   “So you were saying this is going to be the best birthday ever Aaron?” she said to me.
   “Of course.” She smiled at me and I smiled back. But who would of thought, this might be one of the last smiles I see from her.

   I got to her favorite restraunt, Tony Roma’s and we got out. We walked in and ordered our food. It was the best ribs I’ve ever had. It felt like the right time, as we had been dating for 3 years now. I got down on one knee and said: “Will you marry me?”
   “Yes! Of course!” We hugged, kissed, and then it felt like the right time to take her home. We got in my car, and I pulled out. It started raining as if someone put the ocean right above us. The wind picked up, gusts picking up to 55 mph. I had to get her home, because she was scared of all the flashes around us. I drove out of the parking lot and lighting flashed right next to the car. I drove a little faster, getting worried. Then before I knew it, I hear a loud “BANG!” I passed out.

   I woke to people yelling and screaming. The ground was covered in red, I slowly looked to the right and I saw doing compressions on Brianna.
   “Brianna! Brianna!” I stumbled onto her, crying. “Please wake up, please…” I cried harder. They rushed her to the hospital, after bandaging my head up. I felt like this was a dream, everything happened so fast, as if someone hit the fast-forward button on TV. We made it to the hospital and I sat out in the hall. Finally they called me in.

   “Aaron, she is going to be okay, from what we know.” My heart filled with joy, but then I heard a girl from the room she was in scream. I ran in and I looked cardiac monitor. It was slowly beeping, slower, slower, and slower…

   “I thought you said she would be okay!” I yelled. They were in shock, heads down. I walked over to her, put my hand on her stomach and whispered “I love you.” The cardiac monitor went silent…





-------Feedback Please------

LeoReborn:
It was a Sad, yet beautiful story.

There were a couple times I Thought, 'Wait, What's he Saying?'

I also thought it went a little too fast after the crash.

You sped up at key times, and your visual detail was impressive.

Eulogy:
Thank you a lot. I tried not making it to long, but thank you for the feedback. Glad you liked it! =D

St. Jimmy:
I like it, it's sad and beautiful.

Eulogy:
Thank you Jimmy. I will probably be writing more short stories. Just wrote this one yesterday. =D

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