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Eulogy:
The Beginning is The End
Pt 1.
About a man’s life who can’t his life back together, will he make it through? What type of weird things will he encounter? Be a spy? Watch his girl die? Have flashbacks? The new adventure, mystery, action short story series I have been working on called “The Beginning is The End” if you want me to continue it, keep commenting and giving me feedback. Thank you.[/color]
   

   I didn’t know where I was running to, all I knew is that I wanted to get out. I was running from things that couldn’t be forgotten. The look on her face, just sitting there in the rain. The look on her pale, colorless face, her eyes wide open. I couldn’t run away from this nightmare…

   Before I continue, let me tell you who I am. My name is Jeremy Jones. I’m twenty-one years old, around five foot nine, and have some muscle. I’m Caucasian, and grew up in the West, up in Washington.

   I ran back to my house, not knowing what I was thinking. I turned the TV. The news came on. At  the bottom it said “BREAKING NEWS: THIS JUST IN!” I watched the news as it explained what had happened just thirty-four hours ago. I put my head down on my knees, and cried. Tears came flowing out of my eyes, as if someone turned the faucet on in my head. I had to get my life straightened up. But how?

   I decided I had to get her out of my head, I had to get out of the town, and away from this. But then that would be running, and I can’t run. Tomorrow was work, and I couldn’t miss another day or else I would get fired.

   “This is so amazing! How did you do it?”
   “I have my ways baby, now let’s get going.”

   I woke up in a jolt. I was in puddle of sweat, and I heard my alarm go off. It was work. I hopped in the shower, and went to the worst job in the world, working at a retirement home. I walked outside, as the big star beamed down in the cerulean colored sky. I was hoping it would be a pretty good day, but I was wrong.

   I made it to work, and when I went inside, everyone stared at me. The most rude person at work, Bill, walked up to me.
   “How’s Jill?” I soon became furious, my head storming with every type of emotion possible. I yelled, tackled him to the ground and started throwing as many punches as I could. People pulled me off finally. My boss called me in, and that was the end of my job…

TO BE CONTINUED….

The next one will be about him moving, starting a new life. And he will soon find himself in the military. What happens next?

LeoReborn:
W....O....W

I liked how it kept you guessing, Like:

Jill, what happened? is she dead? How did she Die?

All of those questions, they added to the Character of JJ.
His Flashbacks, its like he lost his memory, and is slowly Regaining them, as he does, he gets more and more Upset.

The Incident: Bill Vs. JJ = JJ snaps.

....Wow, I was so overwhelmed, I started Spitting lots of it out at once!!!(Thats good.) I barely have any Idea what I just Said....

Eulogy:
Haha thank you a lot! I was hoping it'd keep people guessing. So do you think I should continue it?

LeoReborn:
Are you Kidding? Its that sense of Mystery that keeps them hooked!!! Yes. Keep On!!!!

St. Jimmy:
I love this. It makes me think of questions constantly! Don't stop this!

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