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These Streets Pt4

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Frenchfry:

--- Quote from: Pubbles on September 25, 2010, 04:35:56 PM ---Write each part longer!!

/whine

But seriously, if you could make each portion a bit longer, either by description (preferred) or dialogue, each part would come out very professional. There are a few places in each of these parts that you could through in a bit more of description and enrich the story a bit.

But you already knew what I thought, but I wanted to post it anyways, so hah!

-Pubbs

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This.
Also,  good job. Could you maybe has character development in the next episode or two though?

Declan_23:

--- Quote from: Frenchfry545 on October 01, 2010, 10:56:03 PM ---
--- Quote from: Pubbles on September 25, 2010, 04:35:56 PM ---Write each part longer!!

/whine

But seriously, if you could make each portion a bit longer, either by description (preferred) or dialogue, each part would come out very professional. There are a few places in each of these parts that you could through in a bit more of description and enrich the story a bit.

But you already knew what I thought, but I wanted to post it anyways, so hah!

-Pubbs

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This.
Also,  good job. Could you maybe has character development in the next episode or two though?

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There will be a bit, but most of it will have to take place in part 6 as I've almost finished number 5.

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