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zylonnick's story: part 1

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zylonnick:

--- Quote from: Jerry on November 20, 2010, 03:37:37 PM ---Still good. One little thing, a typo 'thougt' instead of 'thought' ;)

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fixed

Frenchfry:
Mmm...
Since English is your second language, I won't criticize the tense and punctuation errors, though they are present.

Aside from that, I don't really feel as if there was that much emotion going into the beginning. As the writing progressed, the feeling got stronger... did the writing of this story take place over the course of a long period of time, by any chance?

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