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Riolu And The Big Bad Bully!

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Frenchfry:

--- Quote from: Meowth 2126 on February 22, 2011, 12:58:40 AM ---french fry be quiet

pretty  good

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Meowth, it's called a critique. Good writers, like myself, Leo, and Jerry, give those. It's not mean-spirited, it's something you say in hopes of helping the one you're critiquing improve. You can't get better unless you know what your flaws are.

Wailord:

--- Quote from: PowerPoke on February 21, 2011, 07:28:00 PM ---Riolu was walking past Funny Forest.
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It is a very stereotypical happy story. There needs to be a tad more conflict.

And perhaps a stronger title rather then Riolu And The Big Bad Bully!
Then again the title suggests, a "Happily ever after ending" and you already can see where the story is going.

PkMn Trainer Black:
Add more action. Violence usually gets most of people's attention.


Tis' is a thought unless it is a baby bedtime story...

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