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Pokemon Chronicles: Gifted Ones
Aka-Kami:
There were minor grammatical errors in Part 2, such as..
--- Quote from: PkMn Trainer Black on February 22, 2011, 06:24:03 AM ---it hit Treecko right in the face. Treeckoes/'s eyes were swirled, meaning it couldn‘t battle.
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And..
--- Quote from: PkMn Trainer Black on February 22, 2011, 06:24:03 AM ---
“Time to wrap this up,” smirked Siriana, “Chimchar, Thunder Punch! Mijumaru, Tackle! Both at full power!”
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But otherwise, the story is very interesting and original, i'd liek to read more :3
Mr. Fox:
you might try separating it up a bit, i had a hard time reading it...
Frenchfry:
Whenever there's a new speaker, start a new line.
PkMn Trainer Black:
Got it.
PkMn Trainer Black:
Sorry for the long wait, everyone. HW and school kep me from doing this, but now it my chance to get some bonus points for my grade. Any whozit...
Part 3- Tragedy
During four years of Daveto and Siriana battling, their looked changed, and the four
pokemon grew stronger. Siriana had sky blue hair that went below her shoulders and a little
going in front of her right eye, wearing a white dress with light green sleeves and white shoes,
and baby blue eyes. Daveto had brown eyes, silver hair with spikes going backwards, wearing a
black hat, black dress shirt with a blue T-shirt, black dress pants with one pants leg having the
cross of Christianity and the other having the Phantom symbol, finishing it with black dress shoes
including yellow at the base of them. Ten days before their next birthday. That was all they
needed to know that they would soon officially become trainers. To celebrate, they were going to
battle each other one last time as children. “All right, Siriana. Let’s do this,” said Daveto in an
intimidating voice. Siriana gave a quizzical look while she said, “Right, let’s. Dewott, Chimchar,
ready?” Both pokemon nodded. Dewott took her stance of a dual swordsman. Chimchar was
ready to punch for the win. Daveto expected nothing less from his rival, but he was
prepared. “Grovyle, Charmeleon, stand by for battle,” he said. They were let out of their poke
balls, capsules that take the shape of a ball, and they took their stances. Grovyle took a stance
of a dual swordsman with a hint of a magic swordsman. Charmeleon just stood with his arms
folded around his chest, his tail is burning in the shape of a phoenix. Daveto took action first by
commanding, “Charmeleon, Slash on Chimchar. Grovyle, Fury Cutter on Dewott.” Grovyle sped
to the Dewott while Charmeleon grew his middle claw for power as he stood there. “Dewott, Fury
Cutter on Grovyle. Chimchar, mega Thunder Punch on Charmeleon,” reacted Siriana. Chimchar
jumped backwards a good distance and bowed his head down and closed his eyes. He placed one
of his hands straight backwards and used the other to grab the shoulder. The hand electrified
immensely to the point where Chimchar had to clench his teeth. He dashed off quickly at
Charmeleon. Charmeleon jumped sky high and prepared his Slash. Chimchar jumped to him
and the moves collided, slowly descending them both to the ground with the move still intact.
During the Fury Cutter face-off, Dewott was winning. She finally knocked Grovyle
down, but not out. Grovyle got up and was tired, as was Dewott. Suddenly, green waves of aura
began to form around Grovyle and Dewott released water from her feet. Both Daveto and Siriana
put on their Scouters. They seen that Dewott’s water type moves and Grovyle’s grass type
moves increased in power dramatically. Siriana was the first to get out of shock and shouted, “
Water Pulse then Shell Blade!” She shot a big ball of water then took both of her two shells off of
her chest and created blades of water that took the shape of two long swords. Daveto acted
quickly. “Grovyle charge up an Energy Ball and eat it.” He didn’t hesitate and did so. The effect
was that the blades on his arms started glowing in rainbow colors. Daveto then shouted, “Dodge
the Water Pulse and use Leaf Blade!” Grovyle bare dodged the attack and met Dewott with Leaf
Blade. When the moves collided, Dewott was easily forced out of his way. It fainted. “Awesome,
Grovyle,” Cheerfully said Daveto, “That’s payback.”
“You won by type advantage,” Siriana said displeasingly. They both turned to
Charmeleon and Chimchar. When Daveto was about to say something, the ground shook a little,
increasing in power as the sound was getting louder. “Venusaur, Frenzy Plant; Blastoise, Hydro
Cannon; Typhlosion, Eruption,” Someone said in the distance. Before the children knew it, the
ground shook tremendously and plants with sword-like thorns whipping everyone around except
Siriana and Daveto. Red and Blue came out and seen the hydro cannon rushing towards them.
Both Red and Blue sent out Magnezone. “Zap Cannon,” said Red. “Flash Cannon,” said Blue. The
three moves collided and ended with a tie. Right as things seemed okay, lava and meteors of
flames came towards them. Gold and Silver came out of their house. Gold and Silver sent out
Vaporeon. “Surf,” they both commanded. Their water combined shot straight up in front of
everybody. Steam seeped through the water and that ended in a draw. Red gave Daveto another
pokeball. “Go to the docks with Siriana,” he whispered, “Show the pokemon in the ball to the man
that controls the docks and he’ll get you to the Sinnoh region.” the same thing was pretty much
said to Siriana by Silver. Two pokeballs came out of the air and they, the children caught them. A
voice emitted from afar. “Take these as a token for being in my cat and mouse game, for it
starts now.”
“It’s Gray…” Gold and Blue trailed off in their words. Siriana and Daveto took a glance
on Gray’s figure and took off, looking back at their parents one last time to see them have their
thumbs up with them saying, “No need to worry, future Elite Horses…” Siriana held her tears as
she and Daveto put their thumbs up back at them and said, “You will never leave us, our Elite
Horses…” On that note, they ran through the forest for cover.
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