Creative Discussions > Fan Fiction & Writing

Evil Begets Evil: Rise of Darchu Part one

<< < (2/3) > >>

FireDarkGuy:
With some edits it will be a nice 1.

Robbase231:
Thank you everyone for your comments so far. I'll make sure to proofread my work thoroughly next chapter.

To answer Jerry's stipulation of it being a branch from the Darchu bio in the Rising Legends R.P: Yes it is. I had came up with this entire back-story for This genetically altered evil pikachu; So when the R.P was locked I decided to use it as a fanfiction for this site.
It's quite fun to write

Robbase231:
Chapter four:

Giovanni:

Why is everyone under my employ incompetent?

That thought has given me a headach on more than one occasion, and today was no exception. My lab was in ruins, a mushroom cloud took up the sky where it had once been...my pokemon...Mewtwo was flying away from the wreckage. I told them to make a COMPLIANT clone, not something with intelligence that can make its own decisions like a human being, but NOOOoooooo...they wanted to see how PERFECT they could make him. now I was looking at a couple billion dollars investment going A.W.O.L on me

If anyone had survived that explosion, I would of certainly had them executed. This ammount of stupidity was not to be tolerated. Now that they all were all dead

....bastards.

Sir...where do you want to go? do you want to go back?

what for? I'll send salvage teams later, see what scraps we can get out of that dump

What about...the dead

I pulled out a gun and pressed it against the scientists head, I was not in the mood for being questioned by my employees. His eyes widened as I cocked the pistol

Stop talking

yes sir

What did I just say?

Stop talking


so why are you talking?


the idiot was shivering with fear as I stared him down. I looked behind him, the helecopter door was still open, I smirked

Well?

I...

with a sharp kick I sent him flying out of the helicopter, he screamed at the top of his lungs as he was hanging off the railing underneath the helicopter. I got up and straitened my suit, looking down at the poor shmuck

SIR, HELP ME!!! IM GOING TO DIE


thats the idea


I pulled the trigger, watching the bullet peirce the brain I had paid six figures to keep around....god that felt good. His corpse plummeted down to the ocean below as I sat back down on my seat.

"Pilot, take me back to my estate, I am taking the rest of the day off

Yes sir

Monzta:
Please make more use of periods, capital letters and speech marks. Otherwise, nice work. Keep it up.

Mr. Fox:
Giovanni is one mean guy. But what can you say if you lost a billion dollars would you shoot the guy responsible in the head? don't know about you, but I would make his death very slow and painful...

On a positive note, love the work, keep it up.

Navigation

[0] Message Index

[#] Next page

[*] Previous page