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Re: [OOCC] Poisoned Utopia
« Reply #195 on: January 21, 2012, 03:41:44 AM »
I know, and it's always a good idea to have one. Microsoft word has a good one, but you can add things to your dictionary. Google chrome automatically checks your spelling, so if you're strapped for cash, I would go with that.
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Re: [OOCC] Poisoned Utopia
« Reply #196 on: January 21, 2012, 03:47:32 AM »
I know, and it's always a good idea to have one. Microsoft word has a good one, but you can add things to your dictionary. Google chrome automatically checks your spelling, so if you're strapped for cash, I would go with that.
A quick Google search can get you a free grammar/spell checker. All you have to do is download it.
EDIT: I'm ready for a time change.
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Re: [OOCC] Poisoned Utopia
« Reply #197 on: January 21, 2012, 05:51:54 PM »
Im going to take a good guess and say everyone is ready for a time change. Time to move this forward. Remember, Utopia will have a weather barrier that prevents rain and the like from affecting the streets. The central area is basically shielded from this as well, but can get flooded. Every other area will be affected differently, it will start over utopia, and move South East. The western part is going to be seeing patches of sun, but no rain. Just remember that and you guys will be fine.
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Re: [OOCC] Poisoned Utopia
« Reply #198 on: January 21, 2012, 08:32:13 PM »
@Aqua
A small boy approaches the smith, a little shaky. He had seen her once before when his father went in for some suit repairs. He had but one question.

Excuse me, but my father brought his metal armor in. I had a teddy bear with me, but I lost him. Did he fall in your store?

Axyl starts walking out of the stadium seeying the boy was going to be busy, then she sees a small boy going to her asking about a teddy bear

"a teddy bear.... um..."

she thinks a bit but doesnt remenber any teddy bear, she then looks down at the small boy and gives a gentle smile

"tell you what... you come back with me to the shop, and we will look for it, how about it?"

extends her hand to him so the boy would give her his hand
Dude, Shin, I don't see -one- period at the end of your sentences. And you have like.. various run on sentences throughout the entire thing, you've basically made one big ass run-on sentence. You have promised to improve, but have failed to do so. I suggested that you should download a spell/grammar checker but you ignored it.
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Re: [OOCC] Poisoned Utopia
« Reply #199 on: January 21, 2012, 09:10:38 PM »

Dude, Shin, I don't see -one- period at the end of your sentences. And you have like.. various run on sentences throughout the entire thing, you've basically made one big ass run-on sentence. You have promised to improve, but have failed to do so. I suggested that you should download a spell/grammar checker but you ignored it.


when cortex talked to me about the posts, it was about the size of the posts, not grammar, i mean, your only complaining about the periods at the end of the sentences, which in my opinion its a realy small thing to be noticed, see for yourself:

Double post for a reason: Aqua, I forgot to mention, you broke the posting rule quite a few times. In know you were writing out a battle, but you could have put a little more. Since I forgot to mention it before, I'm going to count this as one warning. Remember, the minimum is 4 complete sentences, which is not that much.
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Re: [OOCC] Poisoned Utopia
« Reply #200 on: January 21, 2012, 09:27:23 PM »

Dude, Shin, I don't see -one- period at the end of your sentences. And you have like.. various run on sentences throughout the entire thing, you've basically made one big ass run-on sentence. You have promised to improve, but have failed to do so. I suggested that you should download a spell/grammar checker but you ignored it.


when cortex talked to me about the posts, it was about the size of the posts, not grammar, i mean, your only complaining about the periods at the end of the sentences, which in my opinion its a realy small thing to be noticed, see for yourself:

Double post for a reason: Aqua, I forgot to mention, you broke the posting rule quite a few times. In know you were writing out a battle, but you could have put a little more. Since I forgot to mention it before, I'm going to count this as one warning. Remember, the minimum is 4 complete sentences,
http://pokemon-universe.com/index.php/topic,4098.msg96978/topicseen.html#new *looks at rule 3*
I think I have made my case.

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Re: [OOCC] Poisoned Utopia
« Reply #201 on: January 21, 2012, 09:35:28 PM »

http://pokemon-universe.com/index.php/topic,4098.msg96978/topicseen.html#new *looks at rule 3*
I think I have made my case.


Whatever floats your boat... if it is such a big deal to everyone that i only don't put periods in the end of the sentences, then i will starting my next post...

If it is a big deal to everyone else, pleasse speak up, because no one until now (you) said anything about it.
« Last Edit: January 21, 2012, 09:38:51 PM by shin21 »
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Re: [OOCC] Poisoned Utopia
« Reply #202 on: January 21, 2012, 09:39:18 PM »
I really don't see it as a huge deal. I mean, having correct punctuation can be nice, but as long as it's readable i see no problem. I think we should all just stop arguing. If Cortex thinks it's against the rules, he'll say so, and that will be that.
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Re: [OOCC] Poisoned Utopia
« Reply #203 on: January 21, 2012, 09:40:28 PM »

Dude, Shin, I don't see -one- period at the end of your sentences. And you have like.. various run on sentences throughout the entire thing, you've basically made one big ass run-on sentence. You have promised to improve, but have failed to do so. I suggested that you should download a spell/grammar checker but you ignored it.


when cortex talked to me about the posts, it was about the size of the posts, not grammar, i mean, your only complaining about the periods at the end of the sentences, which in my opinion its a realy small thing to be noticed, see for yourself:

Double post for a reason: Aqua, I forgot to mention, you broke the posting rule quite a few times. In know you were writing out a battle, but you could have put a little more. Since I forgot to mention it before, I'm going to count this as one warning. Remember, the minimum is 4 complete sentences,
http://pokemon-universe.com/index.php/topic,4098.msg96978/topicseen.html#new *looks at rule 3*
I think I have made my case.


No, I think you're just finding a reason to complain. The lack of periods at the end of sentences hasn't seemed to affect anyone else, and it looks like you're trying to get her in trouble over a technicality.

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Re: [OOCC] Poisoned Utopia
« Reply #204 on: January 21, 2012, 09:46:07 PM »
Let us be honest here, it does not matter what our opinions are. At the end of the day, Shin21 broke the rules multiple times, and kept doing it after a warning.

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Re: [OOCC] Poisoned Utopia
« Reply #205 on: January 21, 2012, 09:49:04 PM »
I do want to know what i did to make you so hostile torwards me, but i won't ask, try to make Cortex kick me off the thread then.
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Re: [OOCC] Poisoned Utopia
« Reply #206 on: January 21, 2012, 09:55:33 PM »
I do want to know what i did to make you so hostile torwards me, but i won't ask, try to make Cortex kick me off the thread then.
All I want for you is to realize that you are making too many mistakes. Please try to improve.

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Re: [OOCC] Poisoned Utopia
« Reply #207 on: January 21, 2012, 10:07:29 PM »
We're talking about grammar, aren't we?
I honestly don't care,as long as I can read it. ( I have some practice reading leet from Homestuck's Terezei and Soullux, but i can't understand it all) So, punctuation is no problem. And, you can always go back and edit it.
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Re: [OOCC] Poisoned Utopia
« Reply #208 on: January 21, 2012, 10:25:21 PM »
All I want for you is to realize that you are making too many mistakes. Please try to improve.

Excuse me? Too many mistakes? Can you anme each mistake i made? Or is it just one that made alot of times that no one seems to care?
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Re: [OOCC] Poisoned Utopia
« Reply #209 on: January 21, 2012, 10:55:02 PM »
All I want for you is to realize that you are making too many mistakes. Please try to improve.

Excuse me? Too many mistakes? Can you anme each mistake i made?
I certainly can, but that is too much of a tedious task to do.

Or is it just one that made alot of times that no one seems to care?
I'm sorry, what?
« Last Edit: January 21, 2012, 11:01:14 PM by RocksEvo »