A Shards Soul

[LeoReborn]

(Shards Pt. II)

In a night of calm and serenity, I clutch Layla Tightly. Her loving embrace was not enough to forget my Past. Kara was on my mind all the time, but do I regret it, no, not unless I forget her will I regret it. I started singing*,
 Believe, in dreams you love so much. I may not know much, but I will Die. I believe in Dreams x3 I believe, In you...

Then I laid down, in my dreariness fell into a Slumber. A state of mind fell upon me, so gentle and serene, I recognize the presence.
'Kara?'
"Leo, its me alright, My spirit is really here, the shard you gave me, Im glad you did, now we can still be together.'
I thought about hugging her, but I had a gut feeling I would only phase through her, so I didn't. Then, She changed the scenery, from a dark dreamworld, to a Shady forest, with small shafts of light penetrating the canopy. We were sitting on a tree branch, which was very comfortable, oddly enough. I could hear a trickling stream, its sound relaxed me so. She laid her hand atop mine, then curled it in her grasp. I was surprised, as I didn't think it would work.

Kara started the conversation with,
"I read the note you left me, I thought it was a sweet thing to do......I love you too, and well, Keith...He turned out to be a misunderstanding person. When I reunited with him, He said 'Why, in God's name, did you kill yourself, It was a Stupid thing to do!' my Response was, 'I Only did it so I could be with you.' except he cut me off halfway, 'I don't Care Why!!!' "
 At this point, She was in Tears, her body trembling. I slipped my hand from her grasp, and held her tight.
"I love you, and nothing can scathe that, You mean more to me than anything. I will do anything to protect you, as I care about you endlessly. I will keep you from all harm, Kara."
She looked up, and warmly smiled. My shirt was wet from her tears....
'Leo, Its time for you to go, but I will always be in your heart waiting for your return. Wake up.'

.... I was a little disappointed, yet happy all the same, I looked at my ring, and the shard shone an Emerald green,
"I love you, too Kara...."

------End------


*=Its a real song, If you know it, Sing/Hum along.


Please comment
As before, I will edit/add as necesessary
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[St. Jimmy]

*Wipes tears from his eyes*
Beautiful

[LeoReborn]

Thank you, Its not as long as Pt I but its good.

[UnationConsideration]

St.Jimmy thanks for stealing wut I wrote

[LeoReborn]

St. Jimmy actually asked for Moar! so I made Pt. II. I bet He Flipped out when he saw it..

[Frenchfry]

Hm... This is making me think that I might write another short story and post it here. Maybe this time peoples will actually reply to it. <.<
Anyways, good work. I'm not the kind of guy that will look at someone and tell them, "Great job!" and put two thumbs up, but exellent job, nonetheless.
Only, your formatting for the dialogue is pretty annoying. Dialogue is supposed to have a new line for each new speaker.
Ex:
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"Lawl this is example text," speaker 1 said.
"OMG nu wai! Does we get paid?" speaker 2 asked
"YOU MUST DIE!!!!1!" Gannon and his minions shouted
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liek that.

[LeoReborn]

  Tankyou.

[LeoReborn]

Hm... This is making me think that I might write another short story and post it here. Maybe this time peoples will actually reply to it. <.<
Anyways, good work. I'm not the kind of guy that will look at someone and tell them, "Great job!" and put two thumbs up, but exellent job, nonetheless.
Only, your formatting for the dialogue is pretty annoying. Dialogue is supposed to have a new line for each new speaker.
Ex:
storystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystory
storystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystory
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"Lawl this is example text," speaker 1 said.
"OMG nu wai! Does we get paid?" speaker 2 asked
"YOU MUST DIE!!!!1!" Gannon and his minions shouted
storystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystory
storystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystory
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liek that.

Hold on...
*Edits*


Liek Dat?

[Frenchfry]

Hm... This is making me think that I might write another short story and post it here. Maybe this time peoples will actually reply to it. <.<
Anyways, good work. I'm not the kind of guy that will look at someone and tell them, "Great job!" and put two thumbs up, but exellent job, nonetheless.
Only, your formatting for the dialogue is pretty annoying. Dialogue is supposed to have a new line for each new speaker.
Ex:
storystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystory
storystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystory
storystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystory
"Lawl this is example text," speaker 1 said.
"OMG nu wai! Does we get paid?" speaker 2 asked
"YOU MUST DIE!!!!1!" Gannon and his minions shouted
storystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystory
storystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystory
storystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystorystory

liek that.

Hold on...
*Edits*


Liek Dat?

yaliekthatkthnx

[St. Jimmy]

St.Jimmy thanks for stealing wut I wrote

You wrote that before??? I'm sorry dude I didn't notice you want me to take it down?

[UnationConsideration]

No.

[St. Jimmy]

Okay.

[UnationConsideration]

Ok.

[LeoReborn]

St. Jimmy actually asked for Moar! so I made Pt. II. I bet He Flipped out when he saw it..

Well Jimmy??^^

[UnationConsideration]

Wow unbreakable made me emo > I shall neva forgive you for what you have done!