Creative Discussions > Fan Fiction & Writing
Goodbye.
LeoReborn:
Yeah, Its more like reading manga, Broken into many parts so you aren't reading a 30000 page novel.
Note: Massive Exaggeration used
Eulogy:
Well I have started on this story that I was planning on breaking into parts, hopefully it does well on the forums. Thank you a lot for the great feedback.
Lol I can tell about the exaggeration.
LeoReborn:
No problem.
Declan_23:
Couple of tips: The time before the crash rushed by too fast. The whole meal took like 2 sentences. Had you gone into more detail here, it would have emphasised how quickly things happened afterwards. Other than that I like it, although your similies are a little... interesting.
The Fireball Kid:
fix some of the grammar mistakes you made, ruins the story when you're reading sentences that doesn't make sense. Overall, I enjoyed reading it.
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