My logic is if I keep trying eventually I will get it. So todays attempt is Nidoking. Nidoking has a pretty good movepool, can pick and choose move from a lot of types that allow it decent coverage. I didn't think that Nidoking's stats were right for him though, he is a wall breaker but his stats were to average for him to do his job properly.

           Hp   Atk   Def   Sp.Atk   Sp.Def   Spd
Old           81   92   77   85                75   85
                  
New      77   110   70   90                70   90

With these stats Nidoking has the speed and attack to become an adequate physical sweeper. Nidoking is also very capable of destroying special walls. Using Superpower, life orb, and rivalry, Nidoking can 1KHO a blissey with max evs in def and hp.

I hope that this is better then my previous attempts. I am still looking for as much criticism as I can get because I know I am still a long way off.

Thanks,

Don't you think it's suspicius how Agnes was set out for Suicune before any other legends? And knew where to finde it?
I'm not makeing this up after you posted, Gold, but since you mentioned it, I might as well tell you. Agnes is suppose to have meet Suicune before the RP started. Like long ago, when she was a kid. I was still deciting beetween her drowning or Sucune getting hurt by hunters, so I didn't post anything about it. But I'll probably go with the 'girl drowning, Suicune saveing version.
I know this seems like I made it up just now, but I didn't. It's your choice weather to belive me or not.
Anyway, do you want me to edit my post?

Sora it is your story in the RP. I stated my opinion, which is exactly what it was an opinion. If you have a plan and like your story then keep it the way it is, I don't mind.

Jerry, you were right. I am surprised you have chemistry knowledge. Im not saying I thought you were stupid or anything just chemistry is not everyone's cup of tea...Sure isn't silver's

I have never been one to keep what I have to say secret. If you don't like what I have to say well tell me. (Or fix the problem)

Lets start off with priority. Priority is important I think.

The games came first way back in 1996 (in japan.) They are the oldest form of pokemon therefore they are the most reliable set of "rules."

Later in 1996 the card game was released. Second oldest, next in line for priority of rules.
Later than the card game in 1996 was the manga. Third oldest, blah blah blah you get it.
Finally in 1997 the anime was released. This is the youngest there its rules are bottom of the priortity list.

Ill explain later why I think this is important.

Ok so for my complaints. Ill start with Sora,  sorry Sora. In the RP you meet up with Suicune, and it is instantly in love with you. In the game pokemon crystal (top of priority list) Suicune runs away many times before you have to battle it to earn its trust. I understand your not trying to mimic the games but making it to easy makes for a bad story. This is my opinion you do not have to agree with me and I am not trying to be mean.

Next Jerry. To put my thoughts very general, you need to learn physics and have to give some conflict in the story. For more specifics keep reading. When you fought in the gym the leaders Azumeril used Iron tail, and you bite it to stop it. Assume iron tail actually turns the tail into iron the force would have been way to strong. (Force = Mass * Acceleration. If the move was fast enough to hit a moving target acceleration must have been high. Iron is a dense material so the mass would be high. A high mass * a high acceleration would equal a large quantity of force.) Biting the end the tail would just crush the jaw of the pokemon not stop the attack. Another thing that happened that confused be, Eleckid used thundershock on the Lapras but the attack was canceled using surf. Surf creates a big wave of water, water conducts electricity, the attach would have been amplified not negated. Also try to win less, it makes for a boring story.

Also, like I mentioned earlier, game rules take priority over anime rules.(in my opinion) So in the middle of the battle, when your pokemon evolved part way through the fight, I think that makes no sense. You gain exp, when a pokemon is defeated, so without having beaten the Lapras your pokemon would not have gained any exp and therefore not evolved.

This is just my opinion, I never said you had to read this post, you dont have to listen to me I just wanted to say what was on my mind.

Fang unwillingly gives Eevee to the nurse as she take it and Cyndaquil to the nursery.

"Hey Hector come here." Fang was sitting in the corner of the pokecenter playing with a wallet.

"The other night I was walking through town, I say this man wearing a red K on his shirt. Together me and Eevee kinda robbed him. What do you think about that?"

"For starters, what is Kamelot? Secondly I didn't engage Cyandaquil I was trying to engage you. I thought you were the man with the Red K on his shirt that I robbed the other night."

Eevee limped over to his master his fur burnt black in some places. Fang looked down at his friend, Eevee couldn't even look up.
"If you must know I am Fang, now who the hell are you and what did you do to my pokemon?"

Garchomp maybe but Salamance eh not really. With a 4x weakness to ice he is easy to kill if your prepared for him.

Ok if you want a pixel art program I can help. This is a program designed with pixel artists in mind.

http://www.humanbalance.net/gale/

Try and find the download page. Programs works great... I just cant draw.

Well, a dark wing begging for mercy from a white wing. I never thought I would see the day. My name is Fang, I will see you again. I said with a laugh as I fell. Although I was no longer touching the dark winged one, his electricity was still causing my muscles problems. The ground was coming fast. Well, I had a good run. Before I hit the ground my muscles regained mobility. I quickly unfurled my wings and turned my fall into a glide. A flew close to the ground exiting the battle zone. While close to the ground I found my sword sticking out of the ground. I reached out and grab my weapon, and continued to fly off.

You will have more of his blood I promise, and the others also. I looked down at my weapon, as it glowed in my hand.